You Are Like the Start of a New Day: And Other Comparisons @ Avondale Logandale

For our third week at Moos the students created sound collages (in the form of poems, of course) of their lives. AKA: a sound portrait! For these first five weeks we will be building a toolbox of skills that we can use in our poetry, to make our words rich with meaning and senses.

Ms. Pease
4th Grade

Comparison Poem

You are like a graceful bird
You are like the silence of a fish
You are like the start of a new day
You are like the point of a porcupine needle
You are like the color red
You are like the breeze of wind
You are like the strum of
You are like the irritating sound of a cicada


Comparison Poem
Gabrielle L.

You are like a blue moon shining
You are like the sugar on my pie
Violets are like a blue ocean
Tulips are like an orange sunset
A robin is like the sounds of nature
Grass is like a soft blanket
An open land is like crickets making noise
Sadness is like a crying hippo
A butterfly is like a quiet midnight
Snow is like an icy floor
Blue is like a soft template
Space is like a silent museum


Comparison Poem
Alexis G.

A pillow is as soft as a cloud
The color blue is like a sad raindrop
You are like soft music in the air
Her hair is like a whoosh in the wind


Ms. Llaguno
4th & 5th Grade


Comparison Poem
Alberto R.

My family is like four of the most beautiful flowers
The sun is like a big yellow light bulb
Animals are like people
My dog is like family
Holidays are like one of the best days of the year
School is like home
Food is like life
Home is like a safe house


Comparison Poem
Maya C.

A hungry man is like a bear
A pony is like a unicorn
A paper is like a feather
A bird is like freedom
Happiness is like a flower
Love is like family
A pillow is like a cloud
A butter fly is like a rainbow


Comparison Poem
Jocelyn R. V.

happy is like funny
nature is like a time of day
actions are like a world
volleyball is like happiness
summer is like vacation
swimming is like raining
music is like hearing
winter is like Christmas
math is like adding
night is like sleep
calendar is like days
plants are like colorful

Ms. Lozada
4th Grade

Comparison Poem
Melissa L.

Snow is like a cool heart
A rainstorm is like sadness
The stars are like dreams in the sky
The sun is like hot boiling water
Her hair is like a cloud
The sky is like a butterfly rainbow
The moon is like a party for lights
The sun is like the girl’s hair color
The rain is like sad songs
The color pink is like a pig
The boy is like a cheetah


Comparison Poem
Alexandra P.

The girl has yellow hair like the sun
I am cold like the snowman
I am running like the jaguar
This sun is like sunshine
I am hot like the sun
I am crying like the rain
The cloud is like a feather
I am sad like a sad cloud
My heart is red like a crayon
The grass is like the color green
I am sleeping like the moon
I am happy like the sunshine


Comparison Poem
Jackson G.

Cat’s fur is like a soft cloud
A tornado is like an angry hippo
A rainstorm is like a sad cloud
A cloud is like cotton candy
A tiger is like an angry rainstorm
A toothpick is like a skinny branch
A hairy dog is like a hairy bear
A sad face is like a sad dog
A rainbow is like disco party
A lost friend is like a sad friend
A horse is like a unicorn
A sad friend is like a sad rainbow



“Writing poetry makes me feel like I can see myself, like I can see my reflection, but not in a mirror, in the world. I write and I know I can be reflected.”
-Oscar S.

“Writing poetry makes me feel free.”
-Buenda D.

“Writing poetry is like your best friend.”
-Jessica M.